
It was English test that day.
Im glad I'm satisfied with my essay.
Before I stepped into the exam hall,
my beloved roommate told me about a story,
a horrifying, murder story.
I had goosebumps on me even though its daytime.
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Eventually, when it comes to my essay,
All that came out from my mind is just
murder and murder
Oh how violence!
My story is as such......
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Start your essay with "Everyone stopped talking and turned their face in curiosity...."
Everyone stopped talking and turned their face in curiosity when they heard her crying. Mom knocked and stepped into her room. She screamed out loud when she saw Jojo in blood, blood on the floor, on the left wrist and a paper knife in her right hand. Dad came in to check out what happened. He immediately drive her to the nearby clinic. Dad speed up because he knew that for every second he delay, his beloved daughter might not survive.
Jojo survive. She had no choice but to forget about the past, forget about what Jason did to her. He is with another girl now. She decided to face herself and him. She met him at school and passed a note to him. "Meet me at the science lab, 2pm. ". Jason did not want to meet her but he could'nt afford to hurt her again.
"Ring!", there goes the bell. Jason looked at his watch, 2pm sharp. Then, he stepped into the laboratory and saw Jojo sitting at the corner, smiling to him. He slowly walk towards her, curiously wanting to know what will she tell him. Suddenly, he felt a pain at his left abdomen. He feel the pain with his palm, all he could see was blood, oozing out from his body, a surgery knife in Jojo's hands and the grin on her face. Soon, he blacked out.
Three years passed by. Once again Jason's family visited his grave, putting flowers and flashback about the memories. Beside of Jason's grave lies Jojo's grave. She killed herself after Jason.
This is not the actual essay, corrections and improvement made.
I hope I didn't missed out anything.
Hope I didn't disappoint you.
Nice one Eunice.. might I say something?
ReplyDeleteTenses, a teeny bit confusing.
Oh..
ReplyDeleteThanks for the critic.
I must improve =)
Ya, needs improvement.... Anyway good job!
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